very interesting ;D
i love what you got going on with the drums - they have a brilliant jungle mood and the little, i dont know what to call them, buzz saws? - in the drum to give it a bit of melody i like the whole thing - drums and little beepy sounds xD
however, (and i know you said u made this for someone for something so you may have not done this on purpose) i reckon you shoulda brought all the drum and beepy sounds together earlier over maybe a minute and a half, then had a build-up with a pad and lay down some jungle-style synth. i know this may not have been ur intention or direction with the song, but im just saying that it would have sounded pretty sweet ;D and if you wanted to maybe re-mix this as a trance remix that'd be pretty cool ;D
keep up the good work! i am gunna give this 5 and 10 because you definitely achieved what you aimed for in the song ;D
-DJ Zoysa